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Would have liked to hear the electronic guitar to have more variety, instead of a 2 note played over and over again for the baseline
if you wanted to get into this song more, might want to look for a Russian singer that would start at about .20 ish
Would be a really interesting tune at that point

really enjoyed from about 2.10 to 2.40 would love to hear what you could do with that kind of idea in a different song

i don't know the visual that you were trying for in this song but i was completely lost for what the song could be used for, what the song was trying to portray, and what the song was alluring to

It was very, very mismatched, even for an electronic drum and bass song,
And no, this is not liquid in the least

There needs to be a clearer bass line
Needs to have a rudimentary chorus or a front sound that can be followed,
and there is no need for 3 down turns in a song, there needs to be a song not a helter skelter of everything that you can throw at the sound board

that was ... unique...

A lead in with a gradual increase in volume at the beginning
Doubles every 4 beats on your baseline
And you're playing with the Corus electronic sounds...

Id love to hear you play with the bass line more to see what you would do with the other sounds that would be affected by it,
I liked how you started the song back up at 2.56 as well, but with such a start that usually means that the chorus notes will come out more, and the bass line will recede a little bit so that the listener can hear what you are doing with the song almost directly (the climax of the song and the pinicle of the tune or apex of the idea that is being conveyed to the listener)
Loved the creativity in the second half of the song

Very, very well done

Your baseline is to hard compared to the rest of the song, id tone it down to 80% or lower if you chose to
also it is a very repetitive song after about 20 seconds
i would chop it off at 1.20 and call it "just a little something you worked on for a little bit"

the use of funk and electronic guitar at the beggining was different
it did add to the flavor of the rest of the song

Overall, it was not that great of a song, I did hear you playing around with the bassline beats at 1.25, and 1.45
But it became repetitive after about a two minutes in

AliceMako responds:

Yeah this is more about the mixing i did ( electronic guitar/drums, acoustic guiter/drums ) then the composition itself, i don't have much of a feel for disco yet but i might get there.

Thanks for listening.

a good place for you to take this is to expand heavily between 0.30 and 0.55
the main song rests inside of that time frame, where you could convey a message about something going wrong in a lab... or something going astray inside of an experiment, or maybe a computer of some sort that has failed...

it could be used in many different space aged videos but it would need to be greatly longer

IF you did not want to expand on the original song type, then i would go into a harder version of a techno or a electronic song, so the listener could hear that the setting and mood has now changed and the song is ramping up, and its getting more serious now and the real story of the music is only now being told

its a really good START to a long and beautiful song that can tell of failure, resistance, and then success... keep working on it

TheMadWasp responds:

Thanks for reviewing, I am really pleased to hear your feedback. As I said in the description I wasn't sure how to continue, but your review has given me an idea on what to do next, thanks. The idea was kinda meant to be a surgery-themed tune,
-Madjasper1

i know its minor but i would have loved to hear the burning of the herbs right after they are lit, there is a little bit of the sound, but the drag on some dried out- water misted herbs, would make the sound and it would produce a stronger visual for the joint

other then that i enjoyed the song, its really relaxed

BabySteps responds:

I never thought of it that way, mostly because I've never actually smoked weed (never smoked at all really)... but i'll see what i can do about changing it. Thanks for the review! :D

I like how you blended the slow parts with him fast parts in your song, the addition and choice of triangle made a wonderful base line addition

Well done, would be interested to see where you would take this in a re-visit

vibe-newgrounds responds:

Thank you. Though I don't quite understand the last sentence about a re-visit. :)

It may be the first time that you have used saxophone, but you did an amazing job
Absolutely use it more often

it sounds just like a real life professional level recording of a song

ZuneInc responds:

Thanks a lot man

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