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if you are not going to have the singer sing, then you need to start changing up the tone more then just adding a sax
Also definitely look into bringing the voice out more, instead of just a monotone volume, a voice is not at all monotone, it has emotion and feeling, not just a single volume,
Think about how people throw rhymes on stage, they hold the mic at varying distances from them and then bring it close to emphasize words or a feeling, push it away when they want people to only see them for what they.. As a person, are doing... To be big or small or looking for a triumph at the end of their beat.

That's the fault of the audio tracks that are in the file format for download...
They have no emotion and can really detract from a song if you are not careful

look into a voice actor that can rap along with you, would love to hear a different track for the voice in this song

BOULLIE responds:

I'm not the one rapping, so I wont be looking for a voice actor to rap with me >.>
There's really no rapping even being done, I was throwing vocals around a lil bit

But thanks? This beat is for someone anyway, they're cool with it

Also, what singer? What string of words are you referring to? Around what time? Point out a bar even, cause your review leaves a lot of room for interpretation and it makes it sound like you were listening to some other beat. Send me a pm if you gotta, I wanna hear this.

You are missing an intro, unless you call 2.22 an intro...
You are missing anything to do with a back and forth peaceful idea instead of just white noise
And the darkness can be brought forth through musical emotion... Not just a mono-tone tone all the way through

If you want a good example of an ambient, dark song search up (cave music Diablo 2)
There are a great variety of lessons you can take from such a song, because dark does not usually mean monotone, but rather a deeper, darker feel to the song, which can be made with a contrast of a really deep bass and a deep guitar, then a few high sounds for the contrast

Try again and listen to a few of the Diablo sound tracks before you make your next ambient song

the piano and the base drum was a nice choice.
and liked how you kept it all fresh with altering the tone with different instruments but kept the same note structure
i would have increased the electric guitar at 0.45 a few octave to have a greater build up of emotion in your song

i would have dropped the electric guitar at 2.00 through __ a few octave to create a stronger visual for a downed part of your song, coupled with the slowing down piano would make a nice comparison as well

Also then think about adding a climactic note at about 1.50 to signify something has happened to something or an event happened to create a deeper feel to the song

It's a very well done song as it is, but id be interested to see the story that you are trying to put it to,
especially since as it stands it has 2 down sections with a electric guitar,

Aphyrmehrius responds:

Thanks for your detailed review :), but sadly i did edited the project file and saved it accidantaly, so i can't come back with the same sounds because i don't remember wich sound i used for the melodys, i have like 6000 sounds in my music studio programe so you know, sometime i get lost in it ^^, anyway i apreciate your review ^^. story ? i would say its the story of a heart filled of love ^^.

i would have taken out the band intro that you had at 0.07, loving the chime triangle that you picked.

There is a sour note at 0.51-0.52 which is out of place
Loved the duel instrument at 1.23

a un-needed instrument at 1.33 (extra triangle) if you were looking to emphasize an idea that is happening here, increase the volume of one of the instruments a little so that it's audible, make it ... Out of the ordinary it shows a small conflict that is happening which would add on dramatically since you add more instruments very quickly, sorta a sudden event that leads out of control very quickly.

Also loved how you created feat at 1.38 ish, really strong visual!
Also really, really good choice for the climax at 2.20 with the long bell

Loved how you made the song non repetitive with in-sync change after change
Liked the duo channels that you had going on at about 0.50
Liked how you played with the tune at 1.30 ish with the fade

i would have toned the baseline back at 2.20 when you did your chorus solo and totally extend the solo!
would be interisted to see what you would do with a lower large file size base line that would mirror the current baseline (making it a electronic house track)

it was a really well done song, keep doing this :3

MooseUnderscore responds:

I'm not really amazing at making music, I just put stuff together and see what sounds good, and that's incredibly easy with square waves and flangers and stuff, so not a lot of the good stuff there was done on purpose.
I don't think I'll be making house or dubstep; I'm a lot more accustomed to fast-paced chiptune stuff, but I still have an awful lot to learn.
Thanks for the feedback regardless C:

I'd suggest that you play with a balloon a little more, varying the volumes and then with it what can be herd as the individual sound, it's not repetitive, but I would love to hear what you would do as you continue to develop more of your skills/ears, also increase the volume of the chorus piano a little to bring out the song to its fullest potential

its very close to a great song, only needs a little more work and creativity on your half :3

Fuzzy-L0g1c responds:

Thank you so much for this! I only spent about of total of 5 hours on this track, so it was kind of thrown together. Your review is very helpful and I will try to spend more time and creativity on more future tracks. Thanks again! :)

Honestly, and i know you knew this, it's one of your worst attempts for an audio clip...
we have herd very inspiring things from your other works, get back to those

flashmakeit responds:

Okay I will delete this one.

Loved how you did the duo sounds for most of the song, that really added to the song
And you stayed within the confines of a true 8bit format.

very well done

SuperBastard responds:

Thanks!

I understand the piano, the baseline, the electronic sounds...
But what's up with the rice shaker that you put in there... It does almost nothing for the song other then add noise in the background
To boot it has almost no relevant beat that i can hear
put in a double bass with a bass guitar to compensate and you can have a really kickin tune going on

Turn down the synth on the singer and it will sound a lot better,
Equally, you might want to look into a duet between a male and a female who sing in opposite
Take the song: hero by skillet... male voice alternating with a female, and they both compliment each other wonderfully, because of the stark differences between their voices

Conquestus responds:

Thanks for your advice. I will heed it for upcoming projects.

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